So far it’s good . I would nitpick the “slow” reaction of the hero , in spite of knowing what’s going to happen in a nutshell . Imo he should be beyond jut reacting and just “discovering” the kill order like the others , but instead take more initiative . Of course i understand that he is at first supposed to be average , mediocre even , and that the novel coming to life is likely shocking to someone like that , anyone even . So yeah i’m just nitpicking
Son DekuGo
That Imp wasn’t ugly, it was cute until they went and pissed it off.
SaltAddict
I swear, if people start killing other people instead of animals
Raleight
Well people Are technically animals too…
arakim
So far it’s good . I would nitpick the “slow” reaction of the hero , in spite of knowing what’s going to happen in a nutshell . Imo he should be beyond jut reacting and just “discovering” the kill order like the others , but instead take more initiative . Of course i understand that he is at first supposed to be average , mediocre even , and that the novel coming to life is likely shocking to someone like that , anyone even . So yeah i’m just nitpicking